X-MEN: The Adventure of Cyclops and Phoenix

X-MEN: The Adventure of Cyclops and Phoenix

A stranded Cyclops and Phoenix are offered aid by an elderly scientist. But is he sincere in his aid, or does he have more sinister motives?

A tie-in to my upcoming X-Men 6: Rise of Apocalypse.

By THEHAWK - Apr 15, 2010 12:04 AM EST
Filed Under: Fan Fic

Alright, I’ve had this little piece written for about a month. I wanted to release the other tie ins first before I did this one. Here is my complete X-Men Universe at this time:

X Men 4: The X-Factor
X-Men 5: The Day of Futures Past
X-MEN: ROGUE’S GAMBIT
Deadpool and Domino’s Gratuitous Story

Well, here it is, let me know what you think of it.

Scott Summers and Jean Grey sitting in the cockpit of a jet as they sore through the skies over the Pacific.



It was dark and a storm that had been building was now erupting around them. Jean was looking at a bank of instruments as Scott piloted the jet.
Jean looked at him as the setting sun disappeared behind the clouds “It seems like Magneto is actually doing some good in Genosha. This jet that he found and gave to the professor is amazing.”
Scott nodded “It sure is. Handles like a dream.”
Jean nodded and turned back to checking the instruments.
Scott looked over to Jean “Jean, a lot has happened in the last year or so, since we both came back. We were engaged before Alkali Lake. And afterwards with my son, Sinister, the Sentinels and Genosha, then Rachel… we never had a chance to talk about it…” He trailed off as she turned to face him. He looked out the cockpit window and tightened his grip on the controls.

Jean smiled lopsidedly as she brushed some of her long red hair from her face, “Scott Summers, you weren’t this nervous the first time you asked me what I think you are about to ask.”
Scott sighed as the wind picked up and lightning streaked through the sky “Jean, I love you, will you marry me, again.”
Jean’s smile faded slightly “Scott, we were never married in the first place, you were married to Madelyn.”
Before Scott could reply, lightning streaked through the sky and struck the jet. The electrical systems shorted out and the jet plummeted to the waves below.


Scott awakes to the feeling of coarse sand beneath his head, rain pelting him from above and water lapping against his face as waves rushed over him. He felt a weight across his chest. He opened his eyes to see Jean sprawled across him, unconscious, her red hair coated is sand and salt water, drifting with the waves as they receded and came again. Scott carefully slid her off of him and stood to look around, he and Jean were alone on a beach, no sign of anyone.
Jean stirred to life and stood up beside him holding her head “Oh, I hit my head, I was worried I wouldn’t get a field around us in time.”
Scott looked at her “What happened?”
She touched a cut on his head as the rain fell around them, “You were knocked unconscious after the lighting hit the plane. I used my telekinesis to protect us as the plane exploded, and we fell to the waters. I guess I passed out after that.”
Scott looked around them, the beach was bordered by jungle growth, in the distance on what seemed to be a hill or cliff sat a mansion with lights on.



Scott nodded towards it “We’ll try there, thankfully we aren’t in our uniforms, so we won’t have to explain that.”
Jean shrugged “Well, you could just say we have a thing for leather.” She said with a smile and a wink. He looked at her surprised. She bit her bottom lip a bit and chuckled “I’ve been around Logan too much.”
Scott nodded as they walked towards the jungle.
Jean looked at the jungle warily “What if we run into trouble?”
Scott chuckled this time “You can lift a building with your mind, and I can blast holes in an aircraft carrier with my eyes. I think we can handle whatever is on this island.”

Scott and Jean made their way through the jungle until they came to the front door of the large, castle like mansion. They stand before the door for a moment until Scott knocks loudly. They wait a minute or two until the door is opened by a young blonde man “Hello?”
Scott smiled “Hi, sorry to bother you, but we are kinda stranded and were hoping that you could have a way for us to get in touch with someone.”
The man looked at them a moment “You’re wet.”
Jean motioned towards the sky “It’s raining.”
The man looked up “So it is. Sorry, we’re not used to guests here, please come in.” he led them into a foyer where he told them to wait while he went for a towel. He returned and gave them two towels to dry off with “If you don’t mind me asking, who are you and how did you get here? This isn’t exactly Brooklyn.”
Jean ran the towel through her hair as Scott answered “ My name is Scott Summers, and this is Jean Grey. We were in a plane, but it was struck by lightning, we barely survived.”
The man nodded “You are lucky, especially to be near an island that is habited. We have phones, but the they are out because of the storm.”
Jean nodded “Where exactly are we?”
The man jerked a bit “Oh, I’m sorry, how rude of me. My name is Alex, this island belongs to Dr. Robert Windsor.”
He led them into a hallway, as he walked ahead of them Scott whispered to Jean “Can you get a reading on this guy or this place?”
Jean shook her head “no, since I came to, I can’t control my telepathy, I think its from when I hit my head.”

They are led into a large open room with a winding staircase, a woman with blonde short hair was walking down the stairs “Well, well Alex, what do we have here?”
Alex motioned from Jean and Scott to the woman “Scott and Jean, this is Patricia Quinn, she works for Dr. Windsor as well.”
Quinn nodded at them “Why are you here?” she asked cooly.
Scott explained the situation again and her gaze did not soften. She looked at Alex and said “Take them to the guest rooms and get them something dry to wear. Then take them to the Doctor.” She turned and went up stairs again.

Alex led them down a corridor towards a bedroom as he did, Jean asked him “How did you end up here?”
Alex glanced back “Well, I was an orphan, and I ran away a lot. Dr. Windsor found me and took me in when I was in my teens. he sent me to a good college and asked me to keep an eye on the island while he is away.” He said opening a door showing a room with a bed and dresser.
Scott looked from the room to Alex “What does he do?”
Alex shrugged “Lots of things, but he is technically a geneticist. A good one too. Well, you two better get cleaned up. There are some robes over there that you two can use, in case you’re bashful. The Doctor wishes to meet you two for dinner in twenty minutes.”


Scott and Jean arrive in the large dining hall dressed in the robes provided. They had an uneasy feeling as they sat down at the long table that was laden with food. Alex sat down across from them and smiled cordially. Quinn sat down a short distance from him and appraised them coolly. A set of double doors on the far end of the room and a dark skinned man walked into the room, he smiled warmly at his guests and sat down at the end of the table.




The man, Windsor waited until everyone had started eating before saying “How do you do? It is a pleasure to have you here. It is not often we have guests, or give them hospitality.”
Jean smiled “Thank you, we are glad you were willing to help us.”
He waved his hand in a motion that symbolized that he did not want their thanks.
Quinn looked at them as she sliced her meat “How did you say you got here again? And those are some nifty shades, where’d you get them.”
Scott adjusted his ruby quartz glasses “We told you, our plane was struck by lightning. And as for the glasses I have them made custom.”
Windsor looked warningly at Quinn who did not press the matter further “You will have to forgive Miss Quinn, she is my bodyguard and takes her job a bit too seriously.”
Jean raises a brow at this “Alex told us you were a biologist.”
Windsor turned his gaze towards Alex who shrunk away from the gaze as Windsor said “Oh did he now?”
Jean nodded “Why would a geneticist need a bodyguard?”
Windsor cleared his throat and wiped his mouth with a napkin before replying “Mutants.”
Jean and Scott stiffened as he said this. He continued “I work with Mutants, helping dangerous ones learn to control their abilities. I specialize in mutants whose abilities are so… chaotic that they have unlimited potential to harm others and themselves. Most of the people I treat are good honest people like yourself, but they are unable to cope with or manage the gifts bestowed upon them.”
Scott nodded as he listened, finally he said “How do you contact these Mutants? Or how do they contact you?”
Windsor smiled “Suspicious one eh? Well I have contacts all around the world. These people investigate mutant sightings and get the mutants in touch with me. I also have arrangements with the US government and the UN. They send me mutants that they capture for rehabilitation. I have saved many mutants who would have otherwise been executed.”
Scott pressed his inquiry “How do you help them? Do you train them in how to use their abilities?”
Windsor nodded “Partially. I also rely on science as an aid for those mutants that are incapable of controlling their powers. For instance, I met a young boy once who was unable to touch a living creature without killing it, he had been like this since his grandmother died hugging him when he was twelve. This young man had no way of managing this ability, so after many months of working with him, I finally isolated the cause of his abilities and… manipulated it. Eventually he was able to control it to the point that he can target only certain parts of organisms, like tumors. Now he is working with a group in Sweden attempting to cure cancer, he is getting married next June and recently sent me an invitation.”

Jean nodded, transfixed on what was being said “How were you able to treat him? What did you do?”
Windsor sliced some meat off of a ham and motioned to the others “Another slice anyone?” they all declined and he turned to answer Jean “That Jean, is the hard part for most people to accept. What it basically boils down to is that I isolated his X-Gene as it is called and I basically mutated him further, pushed his body to the next step in its evolution.”
Jean narrowed her eyes a bit “Isn’t that dangerous, I mean what if he died?”
Windsor shrugged “Well, truthfully he wasn’t really living as it was. I told him the risks, and he agreed with them, he was fine with it. He wanted a chance at a life with others.”
Jean shook her head slightly “but what about collateral damage, say you are working on a mutant that can… create explosions and he just goes off taking out half of a city because you are mutating him?”
Windsor stood and gestured around with his hands “That is what this island is for. Out here only myself and my occasional staff are in jeopardy. Now if you excuse me, I must retire.” With that Windsor left the room.
Quinn stood as well “After your meal I’d appreciate it if you would go to your quarters for the night.” She turned and followed her employer.


That night Scott rises from bed in the dark of night. He looks over at the sleeping Jean, it is so dark he can barely see her outline next to him. He stretched, stood from the bed and walked to the door. He closed it behind him. A few minutes later the door opens, waking Jean up, she sleepily says “Scott? Is that you babe?” She can see Scott’s form walking towards her, she reaches up and pulls him down to where he is sitting on the bed beside her. She leans up and lays her head, sleepily on his shoulder and softly rubs his other, she is surprised when he spoke “Miss Grey, I hate to interrupt…” it wasn’t Scott. She darts backwards in the bed and sees that it is Windsor “No by all means continue.” He said with a laugh.
“You!” Jean says in surprise “What have you done to Scott?”
Windsor chuckles, “Why nothing. Why do you think I ought to?”
“What are you doing here?” She demands pulling the covers up around herself tighter.
Windsor is doing all he can to restrain from laughing “I just spoke to Scott in the hallway I told him that the storm has knocked out our communications with the outside world. He is on his way to the communications room now. I thought I’d tell you as well. Sorry if you got the wrong impression.”
Jean shook her head “Sorry, I just got the wrong idea, you startled me.”
Windsor rose from the bed and shook his head “I’m sorry about this, will you forgive a poor old eccentric?”
Jean sighs and nods “Let’s just not speak of this again. Alright?”
Windsor nodded and left a confused and flustered Jean behind.

The next day went rather slowly, it was still storming. Scott and Jean slept till that evening. They wondered around the mansion before dinner, Jean had still not shared her experience the night before with Scott. Suddenly they heard a blood curdling scream. They rushed towards the noise and in a study found a staircase that led down to what appeared to be a basement. They saw a flash of light and heard another scream. They rushed down the stairs ready for trouble. They came into a large circular room filled with complex and advanced equipment. In the center of the room stood a table and on the table lay a man who was nearly bandaged from head to toe. Beside him was Windsor, who was injecting him with a large menacing looking needle.

Scott removes his glasses and blasts the floor near the doctor, getting his attention. Windsor looks towards Scott as the bandaged man passes out. “Scott! What are you doing?” Windsor demanded.
Scott and Jean rushed down a stair case until they were on the same level as Windsor “What are you doing?”
Windsor motioned to the man angrily “I’m working on a highly dangerous patient and I don’t need any other mutants near him, especially not a psychic!” he said indicating Jean.
Jean was taken aback at this “You knew we were mutants?”
Windsor nodded “Of course! You two are X-Men I’m not stupid. I know all about you and Xavier. I personally know Dr. McCoy. I had planned to offer you aid but I need you to leave now!” he shouted as Alex and Quinn, with a gun drawn, rushed into the room. He motioned for them to stop.
Scott looked at the man on the table “Who is this man?”
Windsor shook his head is frustration “He is a powerful Mutant named Michael Nolan. I’m helping him deal with his abilities. Nolan absorbs or amplifies the energies of mutants near him. He has the capacity to absorb thousands of Mutants energies. Or amplify mutants to unheard of levels. He was simply walking down the street near a low level pyrokinetic struggling to light a gas stove. He amplified her power to the point that she took out two blocks in a massive explosion.”

Alex nods in agreement “The US sent him here for treatment. We need to leave now…” he said as he was interrupted by an explosion as the wall opposite them crashed in revealing a large industrial freezer and a nearly frozen man in a red and black uniform with a mask.
All but Quinn watched stunned as he staggers out, brushing ice off of him. Quinn jumps down from the stairs and rushes to him gun drawn.

The man looks around and shakes his head and says to no one in particular, ”If you haven’t figured it out, I’m the Eddie stand in! And screw RHPS! I get CATS as my back up! Hit it Meatloaf!”



The others look at him in shock as he grabs Quinn and begins to sing “Whatever happened to Saturday night?...” he spins her in his arm, a look of annoyance growing on her face “...When you dressed up sharp and you felt alright? It don't seem the same since cosmic light...” she slipped her hand into a pocket on her coat as he pulled her in close singing “...Came into my life, I thought I was divine...” he trailed off as Quinn shoved a gun into the face of his mask, and pulled the trigger.

Jean gasped in surprise as the back of Deadpool’s head flew away and he slumped to the floor. Scott fired an optic blast at Quinn only for Alex to step in the way and absorb the blast. All are surprised as the blast does nothing to Alex.


Windsor interrupts saying that the mercenaries had been trying to break into his lab for years, since he was working with Mutants, he made a lot of enemies in the anti mutant community.

Deadpool bolts up “I thought it was because I failed to steal that virus for you in the last story. So, you were experimenting on my brain matter to try and find a way to replicate my healing factor in others without it altering their intelligence? And isn't kinda cheap of the author to pull the whole song gimmick again? Well...technically this was written before my story Deadpool and Domino’s Gratuitous Story

“Alex, will you be so kind?” Windsor says. Alex nods and blasts Deadpool into a wall with energy like Cyclops, only it came from his hands.
Windsor looked over at Quinn “I thought you got rid of him?”
Quinn shrugged in disbelief “I thought I did! I honestly didn’t think he’d survive freezing. I mean I tried cutting his head off.”
Deadpool bolts up “You wouldn’t be the first to make that mistake you see about 20-25 years ago depending on who’s writing.” He is cut off as Quinn shoots him again.
Scott tries to blast Alex again, but to no effect. “Jean, grab the mercenary and Nolan!”

Jean tries to use her telepathy to grab Nolan, but her power causes him to boost the powers of everyone in the room.
Alex screams as energy bursts from his hands leveling much of the equipment in the lab.
Quinn starts convulsing as her skin shifts to blue with red hair and then to several other people.



Jean holds her head and screams, her powers flaring out of control. Deadpool and Windsor were flung against a far wall. Several pieces of equipment shatter from the force of her uncontrollable telekinetic powers. Then, her telepathy kicks in. Scott and Alex collapse as they both see visions of a plane crashing, a man tying them together into a parachute “Scott! Take care of Alex!” they fall from the plane and the parachute opens.

Xavier is sitting in his study when he doubles over in pain, clutching his head “Jean!” he cries out.


Scott collapses to his knees as the ceiling of the lab explodes. All are thrown to the ground from the blast, a section of roof collapses on Deadpool, burying him.
A figure drops down through the smoke and haze from a hole in the ceiling. The man had a metal arm and a glowing eye.



He turns to face Windsor who stands in his true form, Sinister.
The man pulled a large rifle from his shoulder and aimed it at Sinister, “Sinister, its all over. Your plan is a failure, your lies have been exposed!”

“You again? You’re starting to become more trouble than you’re worth.” Sinister hits a switch on the wall and the entire mansion begins to shake, “If I can’t have them, then no one will.”

The man smiles and hits a hidden switch on his arm. He, Jean and Scott begin to glow and disappear.
Deadpool picks himself up out of the rubble “Awe, I missed Cable again?” He looks up to Sinister as the room increases its shaking of “Want to sing now?”
Sinister looks at him in disgust as dust and rubble rain down around them.


Scott feels the rain on his face and opens his eyes seeing the dark night sky and rain. He looks down to see that Jean is unconscious across him. She stirs and slowly picks up her head.
Scott looks at her “Did that actually happen?”
Jean looks at him and nods breathlessly “Yeah, I think so.”
Scott looks up to see no sign of the mansion that once stood on the bluff, only what appeared to be a crater “What happened to Sinister, Mystique… and Alex?” he said as he struggled to stand “For that matter, how did we end up on the beach again?”
Jean shook her head, she then held a hand to it “Scott, the Professor says that he heard my pain. He is sending Storm, Rogue and Wolverine to pick us up.” She opens her eyes and looks at the spot where the mansion once stood “I don’t know what happened to them.”
Scott looked at her “Alex, what I remembered… it was real wasn’t it, he is my brother?”
Jean nodded “He saw it too, so yeah, I suppose he is.”
Scott slumped down to the sand “And Sinister has him.”
Jean crosses her arms and looks up at the sky as the rain began to clear “I hate to say it, but I have a feeling that we will be seeing both of them again soon. And they won’t be alone this time.”
She sits down by Scott, who wraps his arm around her “We’ll face it. Together. Jean remember what I was asking you?” She nodded as she closed her eyes and laid her head on his shoulder. He brushed her hair as he said “Will you marry me?”


Sinister stands in a darkened room before a figure on a throne obscured by shadows “Well my servant. The X-Men bested you again. I delivered the two you wanted, and you let them slip through your fingers, and nearly lost the key to my master plan.”
Sinister smiled knowingly “With all due respect Lord Apocalypse, everything went exactly as I needed. I only wished to see if a seed I planted long ago has grown to fruition.”
Apocalypse crossed his arms in the shadows “And is it?”
Sinister smiled and chuckled “It has. It has indeed.”


To Be continued in X-MEN 6: RISE OF APOCALYPSE

Scott Summers- James Marsden


Jean Grey- Rachel McAdams


Sinister- Keith David


Alex Summers- Scott Porter



Mystique- Rebecca Romijn
Rebecca Romijn-Stamos,Mystique,X-Men


Deadpool- Ryan Reynolds


Cable- Michael Biehn



Well, What'd you think? Should I keep doing shorts? This is probably the last one before my X-Men 6 story. I have a really short one featuring Cable that I may release, but I kinda want to leave him as a mystery for X-Men 6.

I actually edited a video for Deadpool this go around, but Youtube is an ass and my Dailymotion account is messing up, so...CATS it is!

Here is a complete list of my Fan Fictions that I have done here on Comicbookmovie.com:

Here is my list of Stories I have written on CBM
DC

Justice League of America Vs the Legion of Doom parts 1-3 (Never finished)
Part 1
Part 2
Part 3

Batman:

Batman3: End of Days
Batman 4 Darkside of the Mind
Batman 5: Shadow of the Bat
Shadow of the Bat: Part 1
Shadow of the Bat Part 2
Batman 6: Knightfall
Batman Knightfall Part 1
Batman Knightfall Part 2
Superman:
Superman: The Man of Steel
Superman: The Last Kryptonian


Short Stories:

Lobo’s Blackest Night, or: Lobo’s Posthumous X-Mas Special
Ghosts of Yesterday (Featuring Zatanna and Question)

Batman Stranger Days

MARVEL:
Nick Fury Agent of SHIELD
Avengers

Spiderman1

X-MEN Story Universe

X Men 4: The X-Factor
X-Men 5: The Day of Futures Past
X-MEN: ROGUE’S GAMBIT
Deadpool and Domino’s Gratuitous Story


Castings:
I have done numerous casting on this site as well, they are very enjoyable and I put a lot of thought into them.
330 X-Men Characters!
THEHAWK Casts the ENTIRE 108 Members of the Justice League
Casting the New Gods of Apokolips
Flash's Rouges
Batman's Rouges Gallery
Killer Instict
Wonder Woman's friends and foes
The Endless
The Marauders
Secret Six
Deadpool
X-Men 4 Cast
Superman
Thundercats

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TheSoulEater
TheSoulEater - 4/14/2010, 1:55 AM
RACHEL AS JEAN! YES!!!!
THEHAWK
THEHAWK - 4/14/2010, 2:03 AM
Glad you liked the choice, what did you think of the story?
safecrash
safecrash - 4/14/2010, 2:43 AM
This story and Rogue's are awesome, I don't think they'd work for a movie, but if Marvel creates its own live action series, with X-Men being one of them, both stories would be great episodes.
theironspider125
theironspider125 - 4/14/2010, 5:50 AM
nice story and pretty good cast, except rachel mcadams, tired of seeing her face on everything
JoshWilding
JoshWilding - 4/14/2010, 6:02 AM
This was a great read as usual man - what an ending..! Nice work on the cast as well although I'd prefer to see Brandon Routh as Cylcops!Be sure to check out my Uncanny X-Men cast below this one and my X-Club one above!
LEEE777
LEEE777 - 4/14/2010, 6:28 AM
HAWK @ Gotta pop out, just a quick pop in to say PERFECT CYCLOPS, [frick] ROUTH (lol) ; P

And overal great casting, cept MR SINISTER!

Pop back l8r at read ya stuff!
GreenLantern2010
GreenLantern2010 - 4/14/2010, 7:44 AM
Hawk@ Great work :D

Sinister is like my favourite villain ever, he's so badass :)

Loved the way you were able to add Alex too,

Aww Deadpool so witty lol, more reasons to love the guy .

Thumbs up from me dude :D!!
THEHAWK
THEHAWK - 4/14/2010, 8:53 AM
@Thales. I've kinda moved away from film ideas, and instead I am working on making my own universe of fan fic. With lots of tie ins.

@IronSpider. Thanks, and as for Rachel, I cast her months ago before she was being posted for everything.

@Teabag, Be patient my friend, teh Apocalypse is soon upon us.

@Joshw. Thanks man, glad you liked it. The ending was fun to do. I still think Marsden was a great choice for Cyke. He was perfect in X-men, but in each movie he kept getting the shaft as far as lines go. The script is to blame for how he turned out.

@Leee. Thanks man, let me know what you think of the story itself. I know we disagree on Daid, but for this story, his voice is just too perfect. I mean just imagining him saying my lines gives me goosbumps.

@Davis. Thanks man. Sinister rules! i have plans for Alex in my next story. And Deadpool... he is just so fun to write. you can have him do anything and it would be in character, there is so much freedom in writing him.

@Anil. Thanks man, these X-stories are fun as hell to write. I plan on doing at least an X-story every two weeks or so. I might actually break my X-Men 6, which is quite long, up into a couple of weekly instalments.
LEEE777
LEEE777 - 4/14/2010, 9:26 AM
HAWK @ Yeah DAVID's voice is spot on, but if he turned into MR SINISTER it'll look like an African American with white make-up on LOL! ISAACS, ISAACS, ISAACS!! ; D

Anyways, very cool story and i luv the small detail as always, right down to the rain drops running down SCOTT's face!

You should be pro man, no doubt about it i'm [frick]ing surprise someone hasn't wisked you away already!!?

Just remember the lil people still when they do! ; p

[frick]ing cool you have APOCALYPSE at the end too dude!!!

BAD A$$ STORY luved tha read man, kudos thumbs r up!
JoshWilding
JoshWilding - 4/14/2010, 11:38 AM
Damn, sorry this (and my X-Club) cast got buried so quickly! ;( Looks like we chose a bad day to post our stuff!
LEEE777
LEEE777 - 4/14/2010, 12:11 PM
ANIL @ That would be cool buddy but i cant see people doing it, half don't even follow the guide lines, saying that i'd be happy not posting MON & TUES or whatever days you pick!

Hell i only post once or twice a week anyways, (or when i can be bothered lol)

Don't like doing rush jobs lol!

Cough O cough Z cough ; D
THEPHOENIX
THEPHOENIX - 4/14/2010, 2:32 PM
Not bad, I actually liked it. Not as funny as the last one, but entertaining.

I like the Deadpool. Very funny.

not sure about your Havok though...
AshleyWilliams
AshleyWilliams - 4/14/2010, 3:49 PM
Great story!
I love the whole cast besides Keith David as Sinister. His voice is perfect but He does not fit the role physically.
CRITIC17
CRITIC17 - 4/14/2010, 5:44 PM
@HAWK: Bout to read this. I think I shall read your other X-Men's as well. I loved your Deadpool story btw, very funny, you captured him well.

@ANIL: Sounds good to me.

TWO DAYS OF FAN-FIC!!!!!!! EVERY WEEK!!!!
Batmanknight
Batmanknight - 4/14/2010, 7:23 PM
Really good man

Next time I should probably not scroll down to the cast before finishing the story. Kind of gave away a cool surprise cameo lol.

I like it, liked the Deadpool story better. I think you should stop the song stuff though. It was funny the first time, this time less.

I liked it though really good connection to X6. Scott Porter is a great choice for Havoc especially as a brother to Marsden.

@Anil- I think thats a good idea, but I dont think some people would abide by it. I'd be with you though.
THEHAWK
THEHAWK - 4/14/2010, 7:41 PM
@LEEE. I'd like to go pro, but who knows, maybe one day... Glad you liked the story though.

@Josh. I know it sucks.

@Anil. I honestly doubt the others would go with that. But it'd be nice if they did.

@Phoenix. thanks, the last one was meant to be funny, this one more serious.

@NightAvengers. Thanks man! I know a lot of people seem to dislike David for Sinister.

@Critic. Let me know what you think.

@BatmanKNight. Thanks man, and yeah, the cast will kinda spoil the surprise. i know what you mean about the song, but that is why i put it in this one, mainly so Deadpool could have a joke about me pulling the same crap twice, even though i wrote this story before the Deadpool one, so technically I had planned this music number first.

Don't worry, that is the last song, except for my usual credits video song that goes with my big stories.
DDD
DDD - 4/15/2010, 5:42 AM
Cool story! Had me in another place and time!
Very vivid detailing! I could almost smell and taste
that Ham! lol

This was more serious than your Deadpool story
but Deadpool was his usual self! lol

Very surprise guest at the ending!

Keith David has the Sinister voice but is not
right physically for Mr. Sinister! Otherwise,
perfect cast!






LEEE777
LEEE777 - 4/15/2010, 7:03 AM
HAWK @ REPOSTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTT!!!

An good luck by the way!
Joslezio85
Joslezio85 - 4/15/2010, 9:23 AM
Dude.......Dude.....I posted my story yesterday and it was right next to yours. So I changed it to today, and it's still right next to yours. You trying to make me look bad? Huh? Huh? Just kidding. I don't really care. I just figured two x stories right next to each other. But, oh well.
JoshWilding
JoshWilding - 4/15/2010, 10:46 AM
Thought we werent supposed to repost anymore!? ;) I dont blame you for doing it but it's going to start the trend of everyone doing again which will surely piss a lot of people off!
THEHAWK
THEHAWK - 4/15/2010, 11:13 AM
@DDD. Yeah, I was going for something a little...out there. This was supposed to be more seriuos in tone, with a cool guest at the end. I think it is important to note that Deadpool and Cable have yet to meet.

@LEEE,
@Joslezio
@Joshw.

Guys, I only reposted because I spent roughly 3 weeks writing this story, and it it gets pushed to number 12 on the page in about 7 hours. i'm sorry, but I think I kinda got short changed on that one. So I reposted it.

I mean most people didn't even see it cause it was 6 down the page by 10:00 AM!
LEEE777
LEEE777 - 4/15/2010, 11:49 AM
HAWKSTER @ The GREEN LANTERN casting i did took 3 months and i never reposted it an that went down pretty fast too lol.

Though i've got 20 new picks now for that so i'll probably do another one lol! ; P

Its a sad fact but Fan-Fic is like that these days...

Hey my bad and i will re-read this dude at some point, hey heres a RACHEL McADAMS PIC to make up for it!



; P

LEEE777
LEEE777 - 4/15/2010, 10:45 PM
ANIL @ Dude I've never reposted anything an never been tempted lol, even when there was no rules.

Anyways whatever days you guys want as the days i'll go by them and wont post any fan-fic, dunno about the rest though, you'll have to stick it to them ANIL lol! : P
CRITIC17
CRITIC17 - 4/16/2010, 4:28 AM
Great fricking story @HAWK!!!!! This was so AWESOME!!!!!! Can't wait for X-Men 6 now!!!

I started reading your X-Men 4 and that is fricking great so far too!!!!! Keep up the good work man!!

TWO THUMBS WAY UP!!!!! EBERT STYLE!!!!!
Nimibro
Nimibro - 4/16/2010, 5:39 AM
this story is really, REALLY awesome. i had an idea: maybe jason isaacs as sinister with keith david as his voice? i mean, keith can be a great tombstone (he even voiced him un the spectacular spider-man), darkseid, the perfect arbiter and even bowser if they ever do a dark, realistic version of mario... but awesome story... i mean, this is really brilliant... and maybe the best deadpool ever (this and gratuitous story)... also, i got a batman 3 idea: batman chasing two runaways arkham inmates, one of them a genius hacker but a sociopath with homicidal impulses who was writing riddles across the asylum walls, in his room and was obsessed with puzzles and riddles. the second is jervis tetch (steve buscemi or crispin glover), a schizophrenic, paranoic delusional molestor and serial killer who kidnaps teenagers, dresses them in alice in wonderland themed costumes, drugs them by tea and kills them if they ressist. batman is criticized and is "crucified" by prof. hugo straynge (ben kingsley or sid haig and i think it's more realistic to have his name to resemble strange and not actually be strange, as it's sounds and looks a bit weird), who is suspected by batman to easen with security and releasing them straight at him purposely, as batman's beggining to become paranoidic. the first inmate, identity unknown (alias edward nygma) starts to kill,pinning riddles to his victims' bodies, and sends batman a videotape, where he admits to hacking to the bat-computer and discovering batman's identity, which he would release to the public if he won't answer his riddles. batman seeks help from an inmate who knew him, julian dei (kevin spacey), who gives him cryptic clues about the man, called by the press "the riddler". he tracks hatter down, and in the climax, is given by julian the identity of riddler: edward nashton (michael C. hall or timothy olyphant), a man bullied by his father, who did not believed his geniusity and thought he was cheating, so he beated him, making edward develop an obsessin with telling the truth, but in a weird, twisted way, as his state of mind shattered to pieces.
Joslezio85
Joslezio85 - 4/16/2010, 12:05 PM
@hawk. dude, I don't care if you re-posted it. I totally get it. It just can't happen to often. I'm just annoyed cuz not a single person has even looked at my story. I did a full fan cast, got a cover drawn and finished the damn chapter. Re-edited, and re-re-re-edited and I haven't got a single comment. Aside from Leee, but it wasn't even about my story dammit.
THEHAWK
THEHAWK - 4/16/2010, 2:34 PM
@LEEE. I hear ya man.

@Anil. Yeah, but yours wasn't buried by 12 articles in less than one day. It took about 2 full days for it to be buried.

@Critic. Thanks man! I have one more story before
X-Men 6. I was debating on whetehr to include it in teh story, but decided to go ahead and release it next week, along with a preview of X-Men 6.

@Joslezio. Cool man, I commented on it :)

@Nimibro. Dude, your comments are getting longer than my stories! lol

Glad you liked it. ANd honestly I'd like an amalgam of David and Isaacs for Sinister. Isaacs facial structure with David's brow and a combo of their voices.

I like the idea you ahve there for a Batman story, you need to be writng fan fics man! I agree about the names, but I keep them as they are in my stories simply because I want to try and stay true to the comics.
Nimibro
Nimibro - 4/17/2010, 12:38 AM
thanks man! also, i do tend to try and write sdome, but or they are long, or i get trouble with script format, or i'm blocked or i'm trying to do (mostly sucky) manips... but i'll try to write the spidey one... also, i heard in the net chris walken, hugh laurie, michael wincott, ralph fiennes, gary oldman, clancy brown, alan rickman and christopher lambert. also, why not jason isaacs full-blown as nathaniel essex (in flashbacks?), him or keith david as dr. windsor and his physical portrayal of the character with keith's voice as sinister? i'm doing a manip of him (wich would be much better than the rainn wilson as dr. octopus manip, and also, great choice with oliver platt! saw some of him in the 3 musketeers...)
THEHAWK
THEHAWK - 4/17/2010, 9:57 PM
Well, i hope to see the Spidey story.

Those are all good choices, but I'd go with David or Isaacs. HOnestly Isaacs is physically perfect for teh role in flashbacks, I just love David's voice though.

Glad you liked Platt, he is a pretty good actor, and my second pick for the Penguin.
Nimibro
Nimibro - 4/17/2010, 10:51 PM
y'know, i'd watch a dramatic, non-action period piece "x-men origins: sinister" over wolverine any day... or even apocalyose origins... maybe clancy brown as the voice? i know he's a character in your x-men 5, but he really did a great job in the new animated series... here is the finished manip
! and for me my best work...:

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THEHAWK
THEHAWK - 4/19/2010, 6:28 PM
Yeah I can see it now, X-Men: Sinister Origins

I like the manip. The face is good, not too crazy about the body though.

I like Brown, but I would honetly put him as Cable if Michael Biehn wasn't so perfect.
Nimibro
Nimibro - 4/20/2010, 3:05 AM
brown can be a lot of roles, like old sandman in spider-man: reign (it would be my second fancast after spidey noir), voice of sinister, george stacey, cable and such. i think the top 3 cables are beihn, brown and quaritch. maybe beihn as cable and quaritch as stryfe? also, it looks better smaller, but the body was a pain, as i had to edit a low-quality picture of a sinister toy... my computer crashed, but i'll try to resize it later...
TANKGIRL
TANKGIRL - 4/20/2010, 9:55 AM
i love it

tom welling for cyclop



kate beckinsale jean grey




Nimibro
Nimibro - 4/21/2010, 4:16 AM
tankgirl@ hmm... tom may be interesting, but i'm with rachel... maybe tom can be rocky horror in a rocky horror remake?
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