Created my own CB character. Presenting Thorn

Created my own CB character. Presenting Thorn

I wrote a story idea for a comic character and my friend is working on some art so we can attempt an underground comic. I'm putin the basic plot outline up, let me know what you think.

By trytan - May 05, 2011 12:05 AM EST
Filed Under: Fan Fic

Sorry I dont have any art yet my friend Dustin is working on the character designs but I thought Id share the plot I wrote with you guys and get some feedback. Rather you like it or think it needs some improvements please let me know so we can clear it up before we get the ball rolling.

The story would start with Gavin Sanders, a young man about 25 years old, and his 18 year old sister Emily. Their parents died when they were both very young and Gavin raised and looked out for Emily. Emily becomes involved with a man named Tyson Dorvont who is a drug dealer, leader of a dark cult, and is known to be primary suspect in dozens of murders and drug related crimes. The police refuse to go after him out of fear however and Gavin does not approve of Emily and Tyson's relationship. After a time Emily realizes how dangerous Tyson is and attempts to leave him wich causes Tyson to become enraged and he kills her claiming no one leaves him. Gavin vows revenge and begins making his own weapons and costume out of supplys he has in his home. He says he will be a Thorn in Tyson's side until the day one of them is dead and it's from that statement that his name is taken.

Thorn's search for Tyson reveals that there is much more under the surface such as the police chief being Tyson's half brother. The chief says that Thorn won't kill him because he's a hero and heroes dont kill, to which Thorn replies that he's not a hero, he's something else and kills the chief. He journey concludes with a final showdown between Thorn and Tyson where Thorn discovers that Tyson's use of black magic has made him nearly immortal.

What do you guys think? would it make a decent underground comic?

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CanadaMan
CanadaMan - 5/5/2011, 9:25 AM
That's pretty cool! I like how you made Thorn more of an anti-hero; and that Tyson character sounds really interesting too. Can't wait to see what Thorn looks like, cause I'd love to see you expand on these ideas!
CoolioVids
CoolioVids - 5/5/2011, 10:35 AM
nice dude not bad...not bad at all
whoa123
whoa123 - 5/5/2011, 10:50 AM
Dude, that's really dark and badass! It also reminded me of the Korean film "I Saw The Devil" and that's a good thing! (if you haven't seen it yet, watch it right away it's really good!)
TheGrayson
TheGrayson - 5/5/2011, 6:10 PM
Pretty good, needs some development, but good Skelton for the story. You have to be careful to not make him batman or dare devil, but overall pretty good. Run with it
Treebeard
Treebeard - 5/6/2011, 9:57 PM
that's pretty awesome man! i love this idea! let's see some artwork! also is your avatar his logo?
Ghostt
Ghostt - 5/8/2011, 12:56 AM
really, no drawing..ima gonna say weak
trytan
trytan - 5/8/2011, 8:19 PM
@ smokahontas ,love the name, and acctually my avatar was something i drew years ago that my friends kinda made my personal logo and i've been toying with the idea of making it The Thorne's logo.

@ghostt yea i'm sorry bout no art yet. We've been working on it, I am by no means a good artist so i kinda tossed ideas to my friend Dustin who is a bad a$$ artist and he's sketchin them out inbetween work and his family. I'll try and get em up as soon as he gets em to me.
Thanks everyone for you thoughts and support, means a lot.
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