What do you think of this?

What do you think of this?

I am making a movie back in Colorado. And I was wondering if any of you would comment on how this story should evolve etc

By coolguy543 - Jul 07, 2012 07:07 AM EST
Filed Under: Fan Fic
Source: Zuri

The Annhil Chronicles





Anubis, the Annihian in which we do not see his face encounters the leader of an extraterrestrial race known as the Klaxon. In exchange for retrieving the three children of tomorrow; a powerful group of three of unknown potential, the alien promises Anubis a Klaxon army with which he can subjugate Annhil his home planet. Two weeks earlier Cronus, and his friends,Magmus,Blake, and his brother in his brother in his shadow Anubis at a remote kingdom in search for a mysterious artifact. Anubis filled with rage tries to the artifact back to his home planet Annhil himself without Cronus' help. Once he touches the Cube it inserts into Anubis and he falls into a deep sleep. The cave starts to cave in and they rush out of there. On Earth at Fraser, Colorado Kyle Bronson fights his opponent in Karate lessons. When he wins the crowd goes and his grand ma takes him home. When they get there. His Grandma leaves to her trip to Asia. The moment she leaves his step brother and his mother come in and permanently stay there. The next morning the boys have a fight over the luck waffle. There mother eats it and they become upset
They leave to go to school and on the bus they talk bout Bella Storm. When they have math session they are stuck with a horrible teacher Ms Snare and Kyle gets detention. After wards Kyle's stepbrother Carter finds a portal and accidentally activates it. Kyle and Bella Jump in the portal to stop it. A worm hole opens in the sky and it sucks the three in. Venus King of Annhil silences the Audience as his son Cronus walks in the room Cronus prepares to ascend to the throne of Annhil. Anubis awakens in his bedroom and Anubis mutates and gives him enhanced strength and metabolism grants him superhuman levels of physical stamina in practically all activities; durability enough to harmlessly withstand high-caliber bullets; and immunity to all known diseases and toxins, as well as some resistance to magic. He storms out of his room and rushes to the throne room. Guards try to stop him but they are no use. He breaks in and kills every body except Cronus and Venus. Cronus fails in stopping him and Venus tries to defeat him but Anubis is to powerful. He then kills his father and retrieves Venus' powerful spear. Cronus escapes and deserts to an unknown location.
Kyle, Bella, and Carter arrive on Annhil and two guards find them and bring them to the watcher. The watcher tells them about this place and that humans are not allowed. They escape and find a volcano place that lives Henry the blacksmith who is in love with bacon. He tells the three that the ways to retrieve to their home planet they must require three objects. The ring of fire, The trident of Atlantis, and The eye of the tiger. Bella Storm is sent with Henry to get the trident of Atlantis. Carter is sent off with robot named Slikver to find the ring of fire and Kyle is sent of by himself to find the eye of the tiger. They all get what they needed and they get together. Cronus a friend of Henry arrives at his house and explains that an evil has awaken and there's no one left to help. The three step in and say they will help. Anubis marches with his new army to a village and causes a distraction leading to a confrontation with Kyle, Carter ,and Bella that ends with the defeat of the three. Anubis escapes and the three train on working as a team and facing their fears. .
The three become divided, both over how to approach Anubis. As the group argues, Anubis' army attack the three's base disabling its electricity and power so they can't see or find the attackers. Kyle and Carter try to restart the power and Bella and Henry attempt to stop the attackers. Anubis escapes after killing Cronus who returns in later films. The three find out about Cronus' death and realize they must work as a team. Kyle and Bella realize that simply defeating them will not be enough for Anubis; he needs to overpower them publicly to validate himself as ruler of Annhil for revenge. Anubis brings the Klaxon launching his invasion.
The three rally in defense of Annhil but quickly realize they will be overwhelmed as wave after wave of Klaxon descend upon Annhil. Bella discovers that a Klaxon commander beholds a powerful weapon and if it is used on the fleet it would be destroyed. Carter and Bella search for the weapon while Kyle goes after Anubis. They have a giant fight but Anubis wins and escapes. The weapon is used on the alien fleet and they are all destroyed. In the aftermath, They are thanked by the Annhilhians and they take the three objects they have gathered and build a portal back to Earth. Henry notes that the three will return when they are needed.




This story has many other details that I wont share but leave your comments bellow to share your thoughts about this movie.
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PJ
PJ - 7/7/2012, 5:03 PM
Sounds good... but a bit more character development
Uhhhhhh
Uhhhhhh - 7/7/2012, 9:24 PM
Sounds pretty good, but like PJ said, it needs a little more character develpment. Other than that, it sounds pretty good.
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