I'm finishing up my next Batman story, and I found this on my computer, and I thought some of you might get a kick from it.
Wow, this brings back memories. This is the first thing I ever posted on CBM months ago in a Batman thread, it was from this that I began writing fan fics here on CBM. I wrote the whole thing in less than an hour, it is relatively short, only three pages total. I also included a list of my other stories and castings, you can look at them if you wish, or just hit Ctrl+f and type in "Here it is" to get to the actual story.
Here is a complete list of my Fan Fictions that I have done here on Comicbookmovie.com:
Justice League of America Vs the Legion of Doom parts 1-3 (Never finished)
http://www.comicbookmovie.com/fansites/OnlyZodKnowsWhy/news/?a=6375
http://www.comicbookmovie.com/fansites/OnlyZodKnowsWhy/news/?a=6474
http://www.comicbookmovie.com/fansites/ChroniclesofMoeniaArcis/news/?a=6608
From that incomplete story I moved on to Batman, with my first and favorite story "Batman 3: End of Days" This story featured Calendar Man, Killer Croc and the Mob, it is still my favorite story.
Batman: End of Days
http://www.comicbookmovie.com/fansites/ChroniclesofMoeniaArcis/news/?a=6927
After that I decided to put my own personal touch on the Riddler and Catwoman in my story "Batman 4: Dark Side of the Mind" This also introduced Black Mask.
http://www.comicbookmovie.com/fansites/ChroniclesofMoeniaArcis/news/?a=7030
After that I wrote the two part "Batman 5: Shadow of the Bat" in which I decided to tackle my greatest challenge. I brought back Black Mask from my previous story, I also introduced Harley Quinn, and brought back the Joker, in what is definitely my darkest story to date. It is defiantly my longest story thus far.
Shadow of the Bat:Part 1
http://www.comicbookmovie.com/fansites/ChroniclesofMoeniaArcis/news/?a=7737
Part 2:
http://www.comicbookmovie.com/fansites/ChroniclesofMoeniaArcis/news/?a=7841
I decided to take a break from Batman and I took my first steps into the Marvel Universe with my own story about Marvel's favorite super spy, Nick Fury. This story acted as an origin story and showed the birth of S.H.I.E.L.D.
http://www.comicbookmovie.com/fansites/ChroniclesofMoeniaArcis/news/?a=8513
And that brings me to my most recent story, The Avengers. This story was all about the forming of the Avengers and the challenges they faced trying to work together as a team, it is a blending of the Classic and Ultimate teams.
http://www.comicbookmovie.com/fansites/ChroniclesofMoeniaArcis/news/?a=8602
During that time I did a number of castings as well as regualr articles, here are my castings includign my pride and joy, the entire 108 memebrs of the Justice League:
Casting the New Gods of Apokolips
http://www.comicbookmovie.com/fansites/ChroniclesofMoeniaArcis/news/?a=6256
Flash's Rouges
http://www.comicbookmovie.com/fansites/ChroniclesofMoeniaArcis/news/?a=6350
Batman's Rouges Gallery
http://www.comicbookmovie.com/fansites/ChroniclesofMoeniaArcis/news/?a=7288
Killer Instict
http://www.comicbookmovie.com/fansites/ChroniclesofMoeniaArcis/news/?a=7652
Wonder Woman's friends and foes
http://www.comicbookmovie.com/fansites/ChroniclesofMoeniaArcis/news/?a=7710
THEHAWK Casts the ENTIRE 108 Members of the Justice League!
http://www.comicbookmovie.com/fansites/ChroniclesofMoeniaArcis/news/?a=8334
Here it is, my original story, completely unedited.
[I would love to see Nolan's interpretation of Black Mask. He is a very interesting and complex character and is rarely used. He could probably be the most adaptable to Nolan's version. Another two character's who would be good in the film would be Professor Strange and maybe Bane. Strange of course would not offer an actual fight, but he could be a more subtle looming threat to Batman. Bane done right would be amazing on film. He is not some drooling hulk like in Batman and Robin, but is an intelligent and deadly foe. Here’s my idea of how it could possibly be done.
Part 1.
At the start of the film a group of crime lords are meeting. They are discussing that despite being hunted the Batman is still destroying their empires, and the fact that they now have a reliable money launderer. One of them mentions a man known as "The Black Mask”, who is beginning to move in on their turf. As they discuss what to do about him the doors break in. A group of men wearing featureless masks rush in carrying automatics. After they come in and hold guns on the bosses a man wearing a dark black mask enters the room. He tells the bosses he's not going to kill them, yet. He doesn't want to fight and he doesn't just want a piece of the pie, he wants the whole thing. They either join him or disappear. As he leaves one of the Bosses bodyguards draws on the mask. The Mask pulls out a pair of 9mm and kills him, and then leaves. The bosses agree something must be done.
Then cut to Batman fighting a gang of the seven masked men at a brokerage firm used as a front to launder money. He was looking for clues, and interrupted them robbing the place. The first two come at him from opposite sides, he sidekicks one of them causing the man to double over in pain. He grabs the second one and throws him into two other thugs. Another thug pulls a gun on Batman and shoots out the window. He beats them, of course, and questions one of them. The thug reveals that they are the False Face Society. He leaves to avoid security; after he leaves the camera shows the legs of a man with an umbrella. Batman investigates further and learns, at the new Batcave, that the thug he questioned works for Sionis International.
Cut to Roman Sionis staring at a city he wants to be his. Roman is the CEO of a rival company to Wayne Enterprise. He became CEO after his parent’s Mysterious death in a house fire, he inherited everything. Roman also is behind a recent upsurge in crime in the city. He uses his company as a front for the mob, a new mask wearing gang known as The False Face Society. Batman realizes this and begins to investigate Roman as Batman and Bruce Wayne.
Meanwhile the mayor has brought in a specialist to determine the Batman's identity, Profesor Hugo Strange, the new director at Arkham. Strange claims that given the right resources he can discover the Batman's identity and cure him of his "disease".
The members of the mob are trying to protect their holdings from the cop and Batman; all the while they are attempting to prevent Roman's men from infiltrating and absorbing their organizations. They agree something must be done about the Bat. One crime boss suggests they bring in "outside help". The others agree, but only as a last resort, not wanting a repeat of the Joker.
Bruce Wayne begins to get closer to the truth about Roman's dealings; So Roman decides to hire an assassin to eliminate Wayne. Wayne is at a press conference speaking about Roman's corruption and illegal dealings when Commissioner Gordon (Who was there) recognizes a serial killer from Arkham in the crowd approaching Wayne as they were leaving. He saves Wayne from Mr. Zsasz. Zsasz succeeds in stabbing Wayne in the leg. Zsasz now in custody admits that Roman hired him to murder Wayne, and that Roman is the Black Mask.
Roman, now ruined, goes into hiding were he begins losing his grip on reality. His gang the False Face Society holds him in reverence because of all the success they have had under his leadership. He dons the mask and decides to take the city by force.
The mayor is speaking to Gordon and Strange about Batman and the Mask. He tells Gordon to give Strange his full assistance. He also tells Strange to build a profile of the Mask as well. Strange holds a news conference updating the people about his search into the identity of Batman. He says that batman had experienced loss at some time in his life, and was probably rich. He also comments that Roman is a sick and sad individual. He has become lost in the Black Mask persona. Mask angered by this puts a hit out on Strange. Feeling that Roman is no longer a threat for the moment, Batman has some unfinished business. He finally found who is laundering money for the mob and goes to find evidence on him. Batman goes to the Iceberg club and records a conversation between the owner Oswald Cobble pot and a member of the mob. Batman is seen spying on them and busts through the window, he fights the guards as Cobble pot, and the mobster run out into the club. Batman, wrestling with a thug falls out in to the club, the thug’s gun goes off and the patrons run screaming. Batman defeats the thug and corners Cobble pot, which is still clutching his umbrella. Batman begins to ask Cobble pot were the mobster went when coble pot points his umbrella at Batman and tries to shoot him. Batman leaves Cobble pot and his thugs tied up in front of the club along with a recording of their conversation. Word reaches the crime bosses and one of them says “Call Him”
Strange is attacked and saved by Batman. During the fight strange notices Batman has a limp. Batman tells Strange that he should back off, and goes to leave. Strange tells Batman that he and Black Mask are both cowards hiding behind masks. After Batman leaves Strange says "Goodnight Bruce".
Gordon is revealed to have secretly been researching Strange. He finds out that Strange has been experimenting on the patients at Arkham. It is revealed that he let Zsasz out to see what would happen. Gordon is even more alarmed to find out that the Joker has disappeared along with Strange's assistant Dr. Quinzel. Gordon has a warrant issued for Strange's arrest. When they arrest him Strange claims that he knows who Batman is, the cops don't care saying Strange would say anything at that point. The mob bosses are waiting in the back of a club for the outsider. They all fear that they will be caught. The boss who suggested they get help comes in and says “We need no longer fear the bat, gentlemen allow me to introduce, Bane.” They look and see a huge imposing man wearing a long, closed trench coat and a black and white mask. They are in awe with intimidation and he speaks in a deep accented voice “I will break him.”
Black Mask begins a war on Gotham using terrorist tactics and guerilla warfare. He sends a bomb to Wayne towers nearly demolishing it. He destroys city hall next. He then destroys the main bridge to Gotham killing hundreds. The cops and Batman are too busy trying to prevent attacks to try and find the Mask. Black Mask is revealed to be operating out of a mausoleum in Gotham cemetery. He sends a letter to the mayor demanding $100,000,000 and Batman or he would continue to destroy the city, he gives them one 4 days.
Meanwhile it is revealed that someone has bailed Strange out of jail. He is forced into a blacked out limo where he is confronted by the Black Mask, who demands the identity of Batman. Strange says “don’t hurt me I’ll tell you everything.” Mask replies “You will, and I will”.
Bruce is angry with himself. He sits in a hair holding his mask, staring at it, staring at himself. “It’s my fault Alfred; I should have gone after him.” Alfred tells him he did what he thought was best. Going after Cobblepot crippled the mob. Alfred gives an uplifting speech. A car is later seen driving up to Wayne Manor.
Bruce dons the mask and becomes the Batman once again. Strange is found in an alley cut, burned, bloody and driven half mad from being tortured. He is loaded in to an awaiting ambulance. The ambulance drives off for a distance and stops. Strange, strapped to the gurney realizes something is wrong. The driver enters the back of the ambulance and is revealed to be Bane. “Another mask,” mutters Strange. “You will tell me who is the Batman” Bane says. Strange says that he won’t tell there is nothing left to him now except the secret. “I respect your courage professor. I to know something about knowledge, and pain. I learned about it in the prison where I grew up. That’s where I got this.”He touches a button on a pad on his arm. The camera focuses on Strange as he looks on in horror at Bane. Outside you hear a blood curdling scream, then silence. Bane is shown an unknown time later exiting the ambulance, wiping blood his hands, and gets into a car and drives off.
Gordon gives the letter from Mask to Batman. Batman finds that the letter has a chemical associated with decomposed flesh on it. He then realizes that the Black Mask is hiding in a cemetery. He goes to the Batpod and speeds away out of the cave. Bane is seen watching the Batman leave.
Batman approaches the cemetery which is situated outside of the main city on a cliff which overlooks Gotham River. Batman enters the cemetery and makes his way to the mausoleums. On the way he is spontaneously attacked by dozens of members of the False Face society. He could easily take 8 of these guys at once but not this many at one time. By the time Batman makes it to the Sionis family mausoleum he is cut, bloodied and weakened, but still resolved. “Hello Bruce, we’ve been waiting.” HE looks in the doorway of the Mausoleum and sees Black Mask holding a gun on Alfred and one pointed at Batman. “I know all about your secret, join me together we can rule this city, you and I we’re two of a kind” Mask says. Batman replies “I don my mask to protect the people of the city, not kill. You, you have become consumed by hate, that is your true face your mask was roman Sionis. You now appear as evil as you are.” Mask prepares to shoot Alfred, when Batman lunges at him knocking them both down the stairs into the mausoleum. As they fall Black Mask shoots Batman, he is still hit but the damage is still lessened by his armor. As they land at the bottom of the stairs Black Mask’s head slams against the sarcophagus of his parents, snapping his neck.
Batman crawls outside and unties Alfred and prepares to leave the cemetery. “Stop Batman and face me” says a gruff Hispanic voice. Batman turns as a huge gloved fist comes his way. He looks and sees the huge intimidating figure. “I am Bane, and I will break you.” He lunges at Batman driving him through a wall and out into the cemetery. Batman breaks free of him and backs away. He stops when he gets to a courtyard that is at the edge of the cliff. “You are stronger than I thought, but see if you can face me now.” Bane presses the button on his wrist, and suddenly he seems to grow. Batman looks on as Bane appears to swell and grow. Bane flexes and the trench coat shreds like paper, revealing a man whose mussels are swelling, wearing a tight leather and Kevlar body suit. There is a tube on the back of Bane’s head running into his suit. “This tube feeds a mixture of steroids into my brain making me unstoppable. He rushes Batman, Batman dodges and delivers a series of blows his movement hindered by his wounds. Bane grabs him and proceeds to “Break the Bat” Batman’s back makes a cracking noise and Bane throws him down Batman draws what strength he can and hurls a Batarang at the tube, slicing it. Bane howl in agony as fluid shoots out of the tube and his head. He backs up and falls over the ledge of the courtyard, falling over the cliff. He falls several feet and lands on a ledge, unmoving. Alfred comes and finds Bruce and takes him away. He leaves in Bane’s car; the police are seen in the background. A barely conscious Batman touches a button on his belt and the Bat pod blows up.
Well there you go my idea for a possible script. I know that a love interest maybe Catwoman could be worked in there somewhere. For actors
All of the original actors of course.
Black Mask- Vincent Cassel- played François Toulour aka Night fox in Oceans 12
Oswald Cobblepot (Penguin)- Joe Pesci
Mr.Zsasz- Tim Booth lead singer of James reprising his role from Batman Begins
Bane- Maybe Danny Trejo he has the size for it, played Machete in Planet Terror, and played in Desperado. I really can’t think of a good actor with the build.]
Well that was it, leave some comments if you wish to.
