Comiccow6's Phase 1

Comiccow6's Phase 1

The first Phase of my DCCU, 'Brought to Justice' is now here in one article! I'll also show some commentary, and all posted in order! Enjoy!

By comiccow6 - Mar 19, 2013 01:03 PM EST
Filed Under: Fan Fic

So, here we are. I've completed Justice League. Phase 2 is starting. And here's the most fun part. I'm posting the whole of Phase 1!

So, without further ado, i present the first and foremost of Phase 1... Aquaman!


Aquaman




So I got some constructive criticism, and I'm here to answer it.

1. You should have developed Jim and Arthurs relationship, Arthur's seems pissed at Orm for killing Jim when he barley knew the guy.

Okay, here, I agree. But, I was having trouble adjusting to a new character. Also, i think I showed enough to make Arthur really mad at Orm. i mean, he did kill the one guy he could trust.


2. You jumped into Aquaman too quick, Arthur should be a joke to the guards they shouldn't take him so seriously you should have made them resent him and make fun of him becasue he is so young. Not listen to his every command.

This is shown by one line, where the guard mocks Arthur. Now, my defense is that these guys might have their doubts, but they get paid to protect their king. What would you do?


3. IMO you should have fleshed out all the characters and developed them more I feel like Arthur magically became Aquaman and learned how to fight. In future projects I recommend you develop the characters more before turning them into their heroes.

Now I only had 3 origin stories, and Wonder Woman was already a warrior. Maybe I should have, but I'm working on Phase 2 and 3.


4. Make the dialogue of Orm more sophisticated he's smart and cunning, I think he needs a larger vocab list.

It's sophisticated.

5. Instead of tridents the guards should have swords. Arthur is king after all right? You should make his weapon more unique.

No way. Tridents are connected to the sea, the trident is a weapon of Neptune and Poseidon. Swords are more land melee.

6. Show him being suppressed by the responsibility of being a king, it was like he wanted to be king. He didn't react to being a king it's like he just went with it.

This is how I'm going to explain this. You are 16 years old. You have no money, no authority, and have never left your small hometown. Then, you are the king of Atlantis. Yeah, would you be exited or depressed? But don't worry, if this is a complaint of yours, Arthur will be more suppressed in the sequel.

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Now, onto Flash!

The Flash





Mirror Master's a wimp, through and through. he was originally going to be the main and only villain, but after James Jessie was introduced, there were so many opportunities for me. He was based off of his reformed self, and 'she' refers to Amanda Waller, who appears again in Superman and Justice League!

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Green Lantern




Yeah, people freaking loved this. Now here's one that kickstarted this whole project... Batman: First Knight!

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Batman: First Knight



This was the first fan fic in the DCCU that I ever wrote. I'm really proud of it, but it's not my favorite Batman fan fic. Now, here's the Man of Tomorrow in Man of Tomorrow!

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Man of Tomorrow



Now, I know I set up Lex as the sequel's villain, but I changed it after doing some research. now, I want to use Zod in the third, but it might be Lex. However, Lex and Joker for World's Finest?

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Here's where things got rough. Nightwing. A sign of things to come, perhaps?

Nightwing



A few people were confused by the post credits scene, and why I killed Jason. The sequel will explain it, I promise, but I can't give it away.

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I couldn't finish Wonder Woman, not even now. I just... sorry. Here's what I got done.

Wondeer Woman



Now, Ares was defeated, sent to the Underworld, Steve fired, and Diana decided to protect the world from menace. There. Done. Epic fight scene, over. Now, the last fan fic before Justice League, Batman: Duality!

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Batman: Duality




I'm really proud of how Two-Face and Joker. I'm a master of bad jokes and puns, and that's exactly what I wanted for Joker. the back and forth dialogue between Harvey and Two-Face definitely came from Arkham City, and I think i got it down here.

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Here we are. The conclusion. Justice League. It was hard. it was tiresome. it was worth it. So here we are. Read it and weep.

The Justice League




Oh, and AMAZO isn't the villain in JL2. Sorry, but he's not. That honor goes to a different, more deadly adversary.
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So that was Comiccow6's Phase 1. Hope you enjoyed. Comment in the usual place.

Until next time,
Comiccow6
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