Superman: Man of Tomorrow: Part 1 (by Comiccow6)

Superman: Man of Tomorrow: Part 1 (by Comiccow6)

The first part of my Superman epic! A twisted challenge from Krypton awaits the Last Son. During his challenge, he will learn about his past, and in order to succeed, accept it.

By comiccow6 - Oct 20, 2012 12:10 PM EST
Filed Under: Fan Fic

THE FOLLOWING TAKES PLACE DURING GREEN LANTERN AND BEFORE WONDER WOMAN



Space. Nothingness. A hunk of green metal floats by Jupiter. It is in an almost human-like shape. It continues to float, towards Earth. As it nears, the robot’s eyes flicker, turning red.
“Brain Interactive System active.”

SUPERMAN
By Comiccow6

We see a huge, gleaming city. Metropolis.



A tall building, The Daily Planet, is seen.



Inside, Clark Kent and Lois Lane sit at the same desk, looking at a computer.

Lois: “So, you’re saying that Bruno Mannheim leads the Intergang?”
Clark: “Well, why wouldn’t he? Crime lord, has connections to Carmine Falcone, it all adds up.”
Lois: “The police have been tracking the Intergang for years now Clark, back when you were in Smallville. They operate on their own.”
“Then we put a ‘Could’ in front of the title.”
A middle-aged, slightly overweight man walks into the room. Perry White.



Perry: “Lois. Clark. I’d like you to meet the new intern, Jimmy Olson.”
An average height, thin, ginger teenager walks up to Lois and Clark. He shakes both of their hands.
Perry: “He’s going with you to your new assignment.”
Lois: “Where are we heading?”
Perry: “There was a meteor crash downtown. People are calling it a UFO, or some bullshit. Whatever it is, find out.”
Jimmy: “Don’t worry chief. We’ll have that story in no time.”
Perry: “Oh, that’s great Jimmy. Oh, by the way, don’t call me chief!”
He stormed off.
Jimmy: Does he always do that?”
Clark: “You’d be surprised.”
He patted Jimmy on the back, and they walked into an elevator.

METROPOLIS PARK
A huge crater is in the middle of the park.

Trees have fallen, and small fires surround the hole. Civilians and police alike stand near the wreckage. Clark, Lois, and Jimmy walk forwards, each armed with a camera. They flash their press badges.
Cop: “Hold up. What about the kid?”
Lois: “Intern.”
Cop: “Fine.”
They walk to the crater, and peer in. A mechanical, green figure is within. The same one floating in space.
Lois: “Jimmy, picture. Clark get an interview with the police. I’ll do one with bystanders.”
Clark: “You know... let Jimmy get the interview.”
Lois rolled her eyes.
Lois: “Fine. Go.”
Jimmy did a fist pump, and ran to the people.
Lois walked away, leaving Clark at the crater. He took a picture of the crater, fallen trees, and a few more. He then looked into the hole, and took a picture of the space junk. Suddenly, it lurched upwards. Wires connected to others, and metal plates came together. An arm came out of the hole, and another. The robot pulled itself out of the crater, and looked at Clark.



“Kal-El. Do you know? Do you know who you are, Kal-El? What power you really have? Do you know who your parents are? Do you know where you came from? And do you know who I am?”
Clark: “Who?”
“I have no official name, but you may call me the Brain Interactive System.”
Clark ran. He ducked into an alleyway. Superman flew out.
The robot was walking slowly through the park. Everyone was running. Lois was on her phone.
Lois: “Clark, where the hell are you? I know this is a good photo opportunity, but you are out of your MIND!”
She hung up, and got into her car, with Jimmy. Superman flew over, lowering to the robot’s level. He dodged trees, and hit the bot. It went flying through trees, eventually hitting the ground. It tumbled, being scraped, dirt getting on the metal. Superman ran towards the shell, and looked down at it. The robot got up, and backhanded Superman. He crashed into the bathrooms, dust covering his suit. Missile came out of the robot’s wrist, flying at Superman. He blasted it with heat vision, causing it to explode in front of the bot. Superman flew forwards, and hit it, slamming the body into the ground. He picked the robot up, and slammed it into the ground again. Superman punched the head, and the light’s in it’s eyes flickered off. Superman looked at it again, and flew away as police cars pulled up.

--UNDISCLOSED LOCATION--

A blond, muscular man opens a large crate.

He is General John Corbin, with two soldiers. Within the crate is the robot. A 40-something, bulky, black woman walks towards him. Amanda Waller.



Waller: “First Flash, now this... General, you need to convince the President to approve Task Force X.”
Corbin: “I’m sorry Miss Waller, but I cannot accept. As much as I want to help take down these vigilantes, if the President declines. so will I.”
Waller: “How... honorable. Well then, we’ll call you when we’ve studied the mechanics. When we recreate it, you’ll have an army. Maybe we’ll finally end the war in-”
Corbin: “What was that? You can insult me all you like, but do not insult my country.”
Waller: “We know about you Corbin. We know about your deals with LexCorp, Maxwell Lord, terrorists, GothCorp, everything. How else could someone so young rise to your position so quickly?”
The General’s eye twitched.
Corbin: “Listen, I am going to stay here, and watch over you. I will report anything that I disprove while you are playing with this ‘toy’, and I swear to God, if you step out of line in the least, I will have this organization shut down! Do you hear me?!”
Waller simply looked at him, and walked away.

SMALLVILLE
A small farm is seen. Clark sits on thee porch. An old man and woman, each holding a cup of tea, sit with him. Martha and Jonathan Kent.



Clark: “That... that thing called me Kal-El. I know I’m not from... here, but... It’s just weird. Figured I’d come to you.”
Pa: “Clark, it’s nothing to get excited about.”
Clark: “But it said that, basically, I didn’t know who I am. Or was.”
Ma: “Clark, you are our son, and you live on Earth. That is all you need to know.”
Pa: “Martha, just leave the boy be. Now, son, it doesn’t matter who you are, or what you can do. You have made a difference. Since Superman showed up two years ago, criminals are running scared. Metropolis is a safe-haven.”
Ma: “Thank the Lord the people love you, unlike that freak in Gotham.”
Pa: “But, back to my point. It doesn’t matter who you are, or what you can do that defines you Clark. It’s your actions.”
Clark: “Thanks. Can I stay the night? Getting rainy.”
Ma: “Sure. I’ll make toast.”

Two Days Later

--UNDISCLOSED LOCATION--
The Brain Interactive System is laid on a table. Scientists surround it.

Waller and Corbin look down from a room, with a large, glass window.
Corbin: “This had better not fail.”
Waller: “What makes you think it will? Okay men, Project: Brainiac is a go.”
The scientists approached the robot. One looked inside.
Scientist: “I have a cut wire. Going to reconnect them.”
He put the wires together. Sparks flew out, and the robot’s eyes flickered on. They became red. It sat up, as metal became smoother, and reconnected. He knocked back the scientists, and looked directly at Waller.
Waller: “Get your men in there.”
She grabbed a pistol, and ran out of the room. Corbin grabbed a walkie talkie.
Corbin: “All men, get to the experimentation room. Brainiac is online. I repeat, Brainiac is online!”
He pulled a pistol out of his holster, and ran.

METROPOLIS
Superman flies over the ocean, looking at warehouses.

He flies downwards, landing on one. He looked down. Using X-Ray vision, he saw a group of armed men, two at the door, two at a desk, and five patrolling. He smiled, and flew up. Looking down at the warehouse, he dive-bombed, crashing in. He floated above the men.
Man #1: “It’s him! Get him!”
They all shot at him. The bullets either missed, or bounced off of Clark. Soon, the bullets stopped coming.
Man #2: “Oh, sh-”
Superman had gone down, and hit the man speaking. He dodged a punch, and uppercutted the man. He sped towards another, lifted him up, and tossed him into another. He took out the rest. One was crawling away. Superman walked towards him, and grabbed the back of his neck.
Superman: “You’re part of the Intergang, right?”
Man #1: “Yeah.”
Superman: “Who’s your boss?”
Man #1: “Bruno Mannheim. ‘Course. I’m not gonna tell you where he is.”
Superman: “You already told me everything I need to know.”
He punched the man, and flew out.

--UNDISCLOSED LOCATION--
Waller, Corbin, and three soldiers run into the room. Brainiac looks at them.

Brainiac: “Where is Kal-El?”
Waller: “Who’s Kal-El?”
Brainiac: “You do not know of the Kryptonian?”
Waller: “I’m afraid not.”
Corbin and his men rushed forwards, shooting Brainiac. The robot looked down, and laughed. It was cold, and artificial.It walked forwards, feeling nothing. It swatted the men away like flies. Corbin looked up at the robot. He fired again and again, until he ran out of ammo. Brainiac grabbed the general. Waller ran to a PA.
Waller: “Evacuate the facility. We have a level 8 threat in the facility. I repeat, we have a level 8 threat in the facility.”
She ran out, leaving the general.
Corbin: “Damn you Waller! Damn you!”
Brainiac crushed his body, as men and women alike ran from the area.

THE DAILY PLANET
Clark sat at a computer, typing. Lois approached him.

Lois: “What’s that?”
Clark: “Tomorrow's story. Turns out Bruno Mannheim is controlling the Intergang. I wrote it up, took some pictures, and Jimmy helped film it, and did some interviews. I just finished editing it. All set for the next report.”
Lois: “Really? Well, while you were busy with the least important news of the day, I was working on the attack.”
Clark: “With the robot?”
Lois: “Yeah. I have everything.”
Clark: “Really? Sorry Lois, but while you were running, I watched. The robot called Superman Kal-El. It called itself the Brain Interactive System. Might want to add that.”
Lois folded her arms.
Clark: “What?”
Lois turned around, and walked away.
Clark: “I love this job.”

PERRY’S OFFICE
Lois walked into Perry’s office.

Lois: “You wanted to see me?”
Perry: “I want you on an interview.”
Lois: “With?”
Perry: “Lex Luthor. I understand you have some history?”
Lois: “Perry, If you think I’ll interview Lex Luthor, then you are-”
Perry: “Right. Now get going Lane, or your fired.”
Lois: “You wouldn’t fire me.”
Perry: “Wouldn’t I?”
He smiled as Lois stormed out.

--UNDISCLOSED LOCATION--
Brainiac stands over the nearly destroyed body of John Corbin.

Brainiac: “You shall be the first of many General. You shall be a test. You shall be my greatest creation. You shall be... Metallo.”

So, that was part one! I hope you enjoyed! Check back soon for part 2!

ALSO, I WANT TO KNOW FROM MY READERS! WHICH MARVEL CHARACTER SHOULD I WRITE AFTER JUSTICE LEAGUE? THANKS IN ADVANCE!

Until next time,
Comiccow6.
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IronLeprechaun
IronLeprechaun - 10/20/2012, 1:42 PM
Pretty good! Not Green Lantern good but really cool, love Braniac can't wait for part 2

and I'm struggling with my Batman fanfic, I'm unsure about using the Joker, unsure whether it should be origin or not and i'm just unsure about alot of things, you have alot of experience give me some tips if you don't mind! I know I do what I want to do but I really want to make a good Batman fanfic and make it my best fanfic, help me out?
IronLeprechaun
IronLeprechaun - 10/20/2012, 1:43 PM
Oh and also about your fanfic I LOVE the title, very original!!! You don't just say Superman you use a nickname of his, I really like that, adds on to the awesome story you are getting to
comiccow6
comiccow6 - 10/20/2012, 2:12 PM
Thanks man. Originally wasn't going to use that title, but changed it. I've said it before, but don't expect any first part of a fan fic to be brilliant, if it's from me.

Okay, down to business. What type of threat do you want Batman to face? Physical, or mental? If physical, you can go with: Clayface, the mob, Deadshot, Poison Ivy, Killer Croc, Zsazz, Ventriloquist, Deathstroke, Black Mask, Penguin, Harley Quinn, Maxie Zeus.
Mental: Hugo Strange, Riddler.
Both: Catwoman (Does he love her?), Joker, Hush, Scarecrow, Mr. Freeze (He's a genius).

If you make an origin story, DO NOT INCLUDE THE FOLLOWING: Robin, Batgirl, Oracle, Nightwing, Red Robin, Jason Todd's Red Hood, etc. Sidekicks should not be in an origin story.

USE CONTINUITY!!!
Are you planning to make a sequel? Than plan it! I dropped a hint about the Red Hood's wife in my first Batman fan fic. Then, in the fifth, I introduced her as Harley Quinn. This can also be used to show that you need to make things original! Screw the source material, but don't burn it. Use the basic components of the characters, but put in your own original twists. I made Mr. Freeze a doctor working for WayneTech, and a villain. However, he clearly doesn't want to be a villain, or feel that he's a villain, unlike the Freezes of the comics.

IF YOU USE DIALOGUE, USE DIALOGUE!!!
Characters shouldn't just be words on a page. They should be living, breathing things. Treat them like such. They all have personalities. Don't make anything just:
"Oh my god, it's a robot."
"A robot? Oh no!"
"Everybody, let's run from the robot!"
That sounds robotic (Just realized how ironic that is). Make it more like this:
"A robot! Ohmigod, everybody, it's the apocalypse!"
"Awesome, a robot!"
The boy's mother grabbed his hand. He continued to stare.
Doesn't that sound better? (By the way, that's rhetorical).

IF YOU USE A VILLAIN, HE DOESN'T NEED A MOTIVE
Or at least, not a clear one. Like Alfred said in The Dark Knight, "Some men just want to watch the world burn." The Joker has never had a clear motive. I never gave him one, Chris Nolan never gave him one, and neither should you. Some villains could have a motive, but you don't know what it is. Take the Ventriloquist from my series. This old man with a puppet, who's a gang leader. You could say he's ding it for the money, but who knows?

And last, but not least,

NO MATTER WHAT YOU DO, BE HAPPY WITH YOUR WORK
It doesn't matter what other people say. It doesn't matter how good or bad the script is. As long as you are happy with what you've made, you'll get better. The minute you stop caring what other people think is the moment you start caring about getting better. And not to give in to them, but to strengthen your own abilities. I'd love to see a shared universe from you, and I think you might want to do that too. But be happy with your work, ignore hate comments, but take the time to read constructive criticism, and the good comments, and do that. Focus on what was good about your story, and keep that going. Look at the constructive criticism, and try to improve that. But most of all, be happy with your work.
IronLeprechaun
IronLeprechaun - 10/20/2012, 2:57 PM
Thanks Man! I'm thinking along the lines of Hush, David Cain or Deadshot (Deadshot only as a secondary villain). I really like those 3 and also I think I could do an origin story. How does this plot sound:

Martha and Thomas die after a family outing outside of Monarch Theater, Bruce swears vengeance obviously... It goes deep into Bruce's past with his dad and mom, Alfred and Thomas were even war buddies at one time which explains why Alfred has devoted his life to the Wayne family. Bruce goes over seas and trains (I'm thinking he trains with David Cain but that seems to much like Ra's Al Ghul so that's possibly a no). He returns to Gotham with no true intentions of being a hero at first, he became a masked figure to hunt Joe Chill and see if his parent's death was set up by Gotham City itself. But Gotham city is worse then ever which brings up the Batman story and stuff like that... Sound good?

Villain stuff: Deadshot could be used in a situation like this: In my story I am making it where Batman is a public enemy in the cops's eyes. He could be hired by some one

David Cain could be someone I expand on later and Hush could be someone I could expand on later with ideas to. I want it to be both physical and mental but I don't know about Joker I've thought about scarecrow but I'm gonna need you to decide which villain I should use
IronLeprechaun
IronLeprechaun - 10/20/2012, 2:58 PM
Deathstroke could be someone I could make a cool story with also when I think about it
comiccow6
comiccow6 - 10/20/2012, 3:20 PM
Not sure about cops hiring Deadshot. Maybe a mob boss? For a villain, I would say either scarecrow or Mr Freeze. I'm leaning towards Mr Freeze though. Joker would be cool, but if you're unsure, don't go with him.
IronLeprechaun
IronLeprechaun - 10/20/2012, 3:22 PM
no I didn't mean the cops hired Deadshot, even with Dirty cops that may not make since... But I am not sure I'll update soon, thanks for the hlep
95
95 - 10/20/2012, 4:21 PM
That's good advice from @comiccow6.
ftoons
ftoons - 10/21/2012, 3:13 AM
Good script, mate. I'd like you to write after JL, The Punisher or Captain America
shock
shock - 10/21/2012, 8:20 AM
I really liked the nods to Batman and Flash. That's a great way to include them in one universe. My only advice would be is to use them sparingly. You want to keep Superman and Metropolis at the center of the story. Great job though! Your writing has improved so much over the course of these stories!

I vote Punisher.
comiccow6
comiccow6 - 10/21/2012, 8:51 AM
I like to think I use them sparingly. I try to make it like the DCAU. Martha actually said the 'freak in Gotham' line in the series. One of my favorites.
shock
shock - 10/21/2012, 2:22 PM
Yeah you did a great job with the easter eggs in this story. Like I said awesome introduction to Superman and can't wait to read more!
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